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The detective looked down at the small form huddled in the police issue green blanket and noticed her shaking body. Crouching down to be face to face, Jonah immediately noticed how delicate her features were and how her golden hair cascaded around her face like a painting of Michelangelo. She had a pixie-like face with green eyes that seemed to angle upwards, a small nose with a dusting of freckles, and a heart shaped pair of lips. I’d love to see her eyes sparkle with laughter. I wonder how tall she is.
 


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01/08/2012 11:22

It almost sounds like he's describing a child. Is there a reason he's wondering about her height? You set up a nice power play--we clearly know who is in control here and who needs protecting.

01/08/2012 11:30

Hi Stephanie!
He is police officer that has just come to talk to the woman who witnessed a murder. It is one of my issues with six sentences is that choosing just six sometimes doesn't give you enough information.

Thanks for stopping by!

01/08/2012 16:03

This sounds so intriguing. The writing is fantastic in just six sentences and I want to read MORE!

-Bonnie

01/08/2012 20:40

Thanks Bonnie! Keep your fingers crossed that the publisher thinks so! I'm excited about this story and already have the two sequels planned out!

01/08/2012 16:04

This left me wanting more. Great 6

01/08/2012 20:41

Thanks Naomi! My other six sentences that was posted earlier on this blog also came from the same story.

01/08/2012 17:13

Nice set up dear. good luck with it!

01/08/2012 20:42

Thanks Liz! It means a lot coming from fabulous you!


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